Some people consider that school education should be concentrated on academic subjects which would be helpful for their future careers and subjects like music and sport are not useful To what extent do you agree or disagree

Many people hold the view that schools should place heavy emphasis on teaching academic subjects because they support students’ career in the future. However, I concur with the view that non-academic subjects are of equal importance.

It is undeniable that academic subjects can bolster a successful career path for the youth. Firstly, these kinds of subjects always impart useful knowledge to students. Learning English, mathematics or literature, students will be armed with basic skills and valuable information which are undoubtedly necessary for their future profession. For example, to become an English teacher, one must be knowledgeable about English and must know how to convey information to students effectively. Secondly, today employers tend to prefer selecting applicants who have excellent academic qualifications. This means focusing on the improvement of academic performance, students will be able to graduate from schools with honors, which attracts recruiters.

At the same time, non-academic subjects are significant in students’ learning. In fact, not all the students are able to learn academic subjects well as they prefer and have an aptitude for athletic and artistic field. Thus, being offered room for learning physical education or singing skills, for instance, students are able to develop their natural talent, which means they can be a promising athlete or singer. In addition, learning non-academic subjects helps students release their stress. There is a link between playing sports and emotional status of people, which means that a level of engagement in sports can dispel sorrow and depression that students suffer. Thus, academic performance of students will be improved thanks to positive emotions.

In conclusion, schools should not turn a blind eye to teaching other types of subjects which also play an important role in general and comprehensive education.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ant in students’ learning. In fact, not all of the students are able to learn academic sub...
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Line 5, column 405, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'athlete'?
Suggestion: athlete
...hich means they can also be a promising athletes or singers. In addition, learning non-a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1620.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66433566434 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92095148076 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594405594406 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6484552032 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0666666667 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53333333333 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317633166597 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110685310748 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416980262237 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186310834857 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460918522408 0.056905535591 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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