Some people say that all young people should be required to stay in full-time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is a contention in a circle that people under 18 are compelled to receive full-time learning. I personally disagree with this argument because staying in school for a long time produces detrimental effects on children such as carrying out a terrible threat to their health and preventing them from being active and innovative.
The first point opposing full-time studying for kids and teenagers is that it is likely to risk their health. It cannot be denied that studying all day puts intense pressure on children, which is an underlying cause of sleep deprivation and mental breakdowns. The plausible explanation of this is that young people, especially those under 10, are potentially vulnerable so that accumulating much difficulting knowledge and doing plenty of complicated tasks place them under intolerable pressure. For example, Korea is notorious for their high rate of adolescent suicide and autism as their pupils have to learn 11 subjects in almost 20 hours a day and have no weekend to relax.
Lacking social skills is another component against the full-time course. A considerable proportion of unemployees results from this method of study as in order to achieve dream jobs, there are many requirements besides an education background. Contrastly, an involvement in many outdoor activities such as sports or social clubs not only boosts self-esteem through achieving goals but also helps pupils learn better as these activities require skills like memorization or management. For instance, despite proverbial cleverness and industriousness, Asian people are left behind by many other countries due to their lack of real-life experience and critical thinking.
In conclusion, it is clear that the risk of health and lack of soft skills are the two biggest drawbacks of full-time learning. Thus, it is abundantly demonstrated that children under 18 should not attend full-time courses.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 410, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...eving goals but also helps pupils learn better as these activities require skills like...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42953020134 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98564196201 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.640939597315 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9024447885 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.833333333 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8333333333 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163373192439 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637912606552 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469144977627 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104803236287 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397863422652 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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