Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is often said that establishing the equipment of sports may improve the poor health of livers. While the importance of sports training is undeniable, I believe that there are several pieces of factor may also influence our health.
Although it is no doubt that sport development can strengthen our body as well as prevent the invoking of bacteria effectively, the significance of regular diet should not be overlooked. The best example of this statement would strongly evidence that the existing diet of Hong Kong workers. Because of the time management is critical as long as their lunch or dinner time is limited, hence, they would prefer to eat in the fast food shop like cafe de coral. Since the dishes at this fast food shop is certainly unhealthy, a fat body from Hong Kong employees is not rare to observe after a long period of work. Thus, the regular diet is crucial as soon as we are improving our health.
On the other hand, living habits should not be ignored also. It is always seen that lung cancer occurs on the older smokers, which proves that our health would be damaged by some poor habits, such as smoking, over contacting with alcohol or the unbalanced sleeping routine. The above examples could lead to a serious disease. Therefore, controlling living habits is a critical measurement to strengthen our body healthier.
In conclusion, better methods should be controlling the living habits and also keeping a regular eating diet instead of building the sports equipment, as far as reinforce our health.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 56, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...nd, living habits should not be ignored also. It is always seen that lung cancer occ...
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Line 4, column 134, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...lar eating diet instead of building the sports equipment, as far as reinforce our heal...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1273.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91505791506 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63076914963 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594594594595 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 384.3 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2331273039 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.083333333 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5833333333 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9166666667 7.06120827912 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131416366869 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508028320712 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035440202292 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.082650729427 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0237537970313 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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