Some people say that the education system is the only critical factor to the development of a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
On the whole, it is often believed that the only crucial factors that determine the development of a country is the education system, while others conversely believe that education is not enough. I totally agree with the contrasted statement. Then, this essay will compare both side, while also focus on analysing my opinion subsequently.
Indeed, being educated is essential. People’s ability will raise if their horizons are broadened. By having a blast education system, we will have a better perspective as well as better life. Furthermore, it makes us capable of interpreting things. The best example I can provide is the various education regulation to strengthen the system in my country. People needs to study for 12 years. The government also provides the additional resources, for instance, by giving an operational money to the certain school, and Smart Jakarta’s card to the unprivileged children. It is perhaps by the authority that this support will give extra chances for kids to get a better education.
Apart from this, there are still numerous critical factors, like the health system and economic system. Not all of the people have a healthy lifestyle. Mostly loves to eat junk food, captivate themselves using gadget until midnight, and also forget to do exercise. In my country also, the economy systems are not good enough. It is commonly happen that malicious people plays victim and steal other’s money. If the economic systems are not secured enough, and the health system is weak, the education will be useless.
Genuinely, I personally think either education system and the health and economic system critical. We need to focus on every factors, while also elaborate them.
To sum up, education system is important, but it is not the only crucial factors.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 472, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'operational money'.
Suggestion: operational money
...onal resources, for instance, by giving an operational money to the certain school, and Smart Jakart...
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Line 5, column 109, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... health system and economic system. Not all of the people have a healthy lifestyle. Mostly...
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Line 5, column 342, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'happened'.
Suggestion: happened
...ems are not good enough. It is commonly happen that malicious people plays victim and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, furthermore, if, so, still, then, well, while, apart from, for instance, as well as, on the whole, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1513.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21724137931 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72663569471 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.2999697336 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.65 106.682146367 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26743712906 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755100049002 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604145878274 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150530615256 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601664200326 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.4 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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