Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing peopletogether. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier forpeople to communicate with one another?

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Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing peopletogether. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier forpeople to communicate with one another?

Some people believe that the Internet can bring people closer. I partly agree with the statement but I think this is not true in some aspects.
On the one hand, I suppose the Internet plays a pivotal role in current
communication. Despite far distance, people can send and receive messages with the speed of light. First, the Internet allows people to connect with friends, family. For instance, people who study abroad can make video calls to ease the homesick. It is not of need to meet directly to talk anymore. Moreover, the
Internet is an approach to linking people to strangers. Therefore, people can
make more friends who are far from them, even international friends who can assist them in learning foreign languages. People even can listen to favorite songs or play games with strangers. The Internet makes it easy to find their lover and get to know the partner. In some ways, getting to know someone online is the first step before they meet in real life. People can keep in touch with old friends if they don’t have enough time to meet in person.
On the other hand, I also think that the Internet has a few negative effects on the relationship between people. In reality, many people dive into the virtual live. Even when people and their friends go out together, they focus on their smartphone with Internet connection instead of conversations. They sit very close but hardly talk to each other.
In conclusion, I agree with the fact that the Internet is useful to shorten the gap between people but it still have bad influence on communication in addition to good things it bring.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
Essays by user Nguyễn Thị Bích :

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 23, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... role in current communication. Despite far distance, people can send and receiv...
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Line 7, column 18, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
...y talk to each other. In conclusion, I agree with the fact that the Internet is useful to shorten the g...
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Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...ten the gap between people but it still have bad influence on communication in addit...
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Line 7, column 179, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'brings'?
Suggestion: brings
...unication in addition to good things it bring.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, for instance, i suppose, i think, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1332.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79136690647 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48764869822 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568345323741 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1857670188 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.0 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4444444444 20.7667163134 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38888888889 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285997509255 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0933699053533 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641923008509 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156621498093 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046794259432 0.056905535591 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.0946893788 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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