Some people say that it is possible for a county to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. Discuss both view and give your opinion
Recently, the balance between economic and environmental sustainability has been in limelight worldwide and created two adverse differences in terms of inhabitants perspective. The first group of people believe that the strongly development of economics drive surroundings to the verge of harmful contamination. By contrast, I would assume that we would achieve simultaneously both economic goals and environment preservation.
It is understandable why some people advocate that nation only accomplishes one object. We have observed a colossal number of reports, articles which are reflected the pollution caused by manufactories, enterprises in many parts of the world. For instance, Ha Tinh, a province in the Middle of Vietnam, has aroused the concern of public owning to a water destruction named Formosa disaster. The coast of Ha Tinh was become an immense grave buried tons of fish carcasses that resulted in a massive volume of toxic industrial waste into the ocean discharged illegary by this steel company. Not only did it cause severe damage of economical profits, but it also brought us negative and direct affects on living habitats. Consquence, this tragic outcome leaved mental scars which most of us invariably have in mind. However, these days in reality, such pitty illutrations like that have been minimized apparently.
In the last few years, environmental protection have becomed a prerequisite needed to be meet by cooporations. There is an substantial decrease in emissions of smog into asmostphere as well as posion chemicals into water and, in case of creating credit with consumers, more heplful for companies. Furthermore, authority leaders have invested a huge mount of money to facilitate building eco-friendly systems as well as organize conferences to tackle problem, and then inhancing the awareness of saving environment. Therefore, this interaction is a great conditions opening up a new era of co-development between these two factors. And finally, a prime example for the standpoint above, the tendency of usetilizing alternative sources of energy instead of traditional one. One of the most popular resources, solar energy, solar pins for specific, evironmental friendly, have been installed in several rooftops of factories; and aslo gain economical merits because of its cheap cost. Besides, elictricity is a new trend for automobikes groups like Tesla; they make advantages of this sort of energy to oporate luxury cars instead of gasoline.
To recapitulate, it seems that nations are able to reap a great number of environmental benefits thanks to achievements of economics inspite of certain drawbacks. Again, I strongly contend that it is completely possible coexisting with the attempts of both governments and enterprises.
Comments
It deserves 8.0 or over.
It deserves 8.0 or over.
We saw some grammatical errors only, like:
the strongly development of economics drive surroundings to the verge of harmful contamination.
should be:
the strong development of economics drives surroundings to the verge of harmful contamination.
thank you so much for your
thank you so much for your comment. however, could you give me some sugsestion to adjust vocab more intricate and academic?
You did pretty well on
You did pretty well on vocabulary words from this essay. Don't need to focus on vocab that much.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 122, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...d to be meet by cooporations. There is an substantial decrease in emissions of sm...
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Line 3, column 1101, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ake advantages of this sort of energy to oporate luxury cars instead of gasoline....
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...porate luxury cars instead of gasoline. To recapitulate, it seems that nations a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, besides, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, sort of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 41.998997996 160% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2348.0 1615.20841683 145% => OK
No of words: 424.0 315.596192385 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53773584906 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21620640259 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 176.041082164 156% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64858490566 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 765.9 506.74238477 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9727997125 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.578947368 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3157894737 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05263157895 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176877793413 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462462603893 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0303080841695 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102767692319 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0202269229235 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.65 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 159.0 78.4519038076 203% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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