Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent don you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

To what extent don you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is argued that music has made life better in order to get gather the people in different ages and cultures. This essay agrees with that statement because music is one of art which contains any instrument and it can make people fun and enjoy when listen it.

Music is one of helping individuals from problems or stress with the song of instruments and tone, some people can listen all of kind of music with application or platform like spotify and JOOX in their mobile phone. By this, people in different ages and cultures should accept more types of song since there is a slow and pop music that can stain their mind and exist types of music that can provide them in party of other event. For example, the Brazilian Prime Minister welcomed their citizens in their white House parliamentary with National Anthem, so the people who come to this house feel more enjoy and fun.

Another reason why music should be accepted by some people is the fact that music has a beautiful voice for other people to hear. A musician is in control with the song in need which can adapt in a very quick people surrounding them. They can create the song related with phenomena in their society like love song for adults, and sad song for upset people. A side from that, music has a tie up with countries and organizations dedicated in helping people to meet each other. For instance, Australian Government with the help of Linkin Park band have provided the national song can be adapted by their society due to the song that was sung can captivate many people. So they will enjoy and fun when they listen it.

In conclusion, music has beautiful instrument and it has a role to decorate the society. I therefore believe that music should be adapted to all of people in different backgrounds.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1466.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62460567823 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34478033201 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498422712934 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 459.9 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8507832608 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.769230769 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3846153846 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254348035588 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108707023287 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066326571379 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183099032121 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451537319616 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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