Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Today the pace of globalization has accelerated in favor of developing media by which expected that they will be a cornerstone for a unit universal nation. In this regard, I strongly believe that among various media nothing like music has this magic power to gather people of disparate cultures. However, in terms of the gathering of different generations, the role of music to have the same impact is more controversial.
Singing the national anthem by people from disparate cultures under a unit flag, itself, is the most significant proof for my point. In fact, national anthem as music elicit sentiments of unity and strength among folks like there is an invisible string collected them as a oneness nation. Likewise, common emotions between humans can be Interconnected where there is music. Moreover,according to the one of my memorable experience, I was enjoying Yani concert as a Persian, while who set my next and my back was Arab and Briton with an apparently different culture. Yet, we never felt estrangement or separation thanks to the magic power of music. Therefore, since, music is an art which is rooted in our common emotions, it can be definitely successful in bringing people from different cultures.
On the other hand, although music is preeminent media to gather people with all their difference, there is comparatively less impact for disparate generations. Because as we grew up, some of our special feelings changed. Consequently, we experience different emotions as we age. Accordingly, there are various kinds of music to meet favor of different ages. For example, in my country, adolescence more prefers rock music, and people between age 20 to 40, pop music is their preference, in contrast, classical music is favorite music for elderly persons. In fact, the more age difference the more taste difference which leads that music is not a particularly decent unifier in terms of generational disparity due to people tend to enjoy the music from their formative years.
4-1) To conclude, even though music may not prosper to gather young and old. It definitely uses its universality to bring together different cultures. It is especially important at a time when the world appears to be more divided than ever that we find common ground to build cross-cultural relationships.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, apparently, consequently, however, if, likewise, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, in contrast, in fact, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 376.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13829787234 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0109953927 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561170212766 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6901262584 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.333333333 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8888888889 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38888888889 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230380353619 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725839315331 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468683268526 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134712366072 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536139449092 0.056905535591 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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