Some people say that spending time to develop a successful career is the most important thing. Others say that spending time with friends and family is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
People have different views with regard to expenditure of time. While some consider that the most paramount thing is to develop own career, others claim that there are other factors to spend time on such as family or friends. I, in turn, have a tendency to support the latter opinion.
On the one hand, people who put forward the view that career is essential have reasons why they support this idea. Firstly, addiction to their job may be caused by people's character. For example, if people are too shy or introverted, they will have a difficulty to make friends. Hence, they may prefer to do their job instead of hanging out with friends. Secondly, the majority of people have a passion for their job, therefore, they prefer to improve their career. This kind of people pay more attention to their work rather than family or friends. Since, job is vital and it is happiness for them, when they achieve their best in their job.
On the other hand, there are other factors which is in the same level with career. One of them is relationship. Namely, people should notice their family and friends. Because, they are one of the most indespensable part of our life. They always help and advise us in our ups and downs. For instance, if we have some problems in our work, we can solve them with the help of our itnimates. Furthermore, there is another factor besides job, family and friends, it is hobby. For it helps people to spend their time interestingly . As an exemple, people are bored or tired with their work, they can deal with their pastime activities in order to improve efficiency.
In conclusion, people should not limit themselves with only job and they should feel that there are other important things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, with regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1423.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72757475083 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40208681186 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524916943522 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 434.7 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2555595055 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.15 106.682146367 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.05 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217810624755 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749292367584 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0777102953812 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171520122328 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1031552592 0.056905535591 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 13.0946893788 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 50.2224549098 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.3001002004 60% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.56 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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