Some people say that teenagers should work part time and earn money This way they will learn basic lessons about work and become more disciplined Others argue that teenagers shouldn t sacrifice their rest and after school activities to work Discuss both v

Human nature is always aspiring to be great, it never stops the ambition of evolution and modernisation. Work is an inevitable consequence of growing older, as each and every single person will have to work at a point or another in life. Although a plethora of people believe that the earlier the better, some are still reluctant towards the idea of working teenagers.

To begin with, part time jobs are an amazing opportunity for a lot of people, these jobs allows teens to explore the real life world in such a young age. Gaining such an unaffordable experience ,compared to their peers, aids in the development of an independent helpful citizen. Adding to that, it is explicitly obvious that countries which allows work vacancies for youngsters, have a better economy compared to those that refuse the concept. To illustrate, the USA for example permits 13-year-olds to go hunting for job opportunities; thus, it is one for the leading countries in world, economical wise. On the other hand, Egypt which only allows children to focus on their education, is quite lagging behind on the world's economy list.

One of the hinders towards spreading part time jobs world wide are people, who are reluctant to adopt the concept. They claim that these type jobs not only affects the academic performance of students, but it also stands in the way of their development and deprives them of free time. However, this is void of any plausible reasons, as it is generally noticed that people who start working from such a young age are more prone to being successful in the modern world. It is also believed that most of today's world "successful people" did not graduate college and worked part time jobs to support themselves financially.

To summarise, it has been debated whether it is suitable for teenagers to work besides studying. While the majority encourages the idea, a minor group is still sceptic about it. In my opinion I support the former stance, as Facebook and Tesla cars were not created by college graduates, nor by dependent people.

Votes
Average: 9 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Duplicated 'the' in the phrase: 'the earlier the'. Did you mean 'earlier the'?
Suggestion: earlier the
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Suggestion: part-time
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Suggestion: part-time
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, so, still, thus, while, for example, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95953757225 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74864456495 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601156069364 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.274055638 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 114.4 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0666666667 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192860931415 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616243838113 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500755216733 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11486976734 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446406532483 0.056905535591 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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