Some people think family has the most powerful influence on children’s development. Others, however, believe that other things have greater effects.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is argued that there are many factors which have significant impacts on the children’ s growth. While many people believe that one of the crucial elements is family, I recommend that the other factors including friends and social relationships play an important role in their development.
On the one hand, there is no denying that children are remarkably affected by their family members, especially their parents. Before becoming mature enough to contact other relationships by themselves, children are fostered and received the domestic education and family tradition by their own parents. Furthermore, they will be more likely to continue contacting their parents and family members than other people even if they are old enough to start to go to school. As a result, children tend to imitate and be familiar with the family adults’ behaviour and habits, including in positive and negative. Without any doubt, the profound effects of family gradually build up their characteristics and personalities of the child in later life when they are young.
However, I find a variety of strong arguments about how much other relationships like friends and teachers influence children’s growth. In terms of the friend cycle, it is easy to recognize that friendships are so necessary towards a child that the cycle of friends is just ranked after their parents. When a child has opportunities to play and socialize with their friends, they are able to gain useful benefits from learning soft skills such as communicative and co-operative skills. In addition, they find more helpful experiences on schooling, which their parents cannot bring for them. Educators are willing to teach them not only academic knowledge but also ethics lessons in order to ensure a well-rounded development for children.
In conclusion, there are many supportive reasons why both family and other social relationship cycles lead to positive or negative development of a child. If people create a good environment and condition for raising and educating children, they will tend to become typical models in future, which needs the participants of both family and society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 281, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...they will tend to become typical models in future, which needs the participants of both f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3284457478 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90690841412 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58357771261 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.5174490086 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 129.785714286 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3571428571 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186664698437 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674549713734 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449298434569 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121457647211 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384127000663 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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