Some people think that the government should ban all forms of dangerous sports; others believe that people should be free to make decisions for themselves. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. (2011年7月30日A类)

Essay topics:

Some people think that the government should ban all forms of dangerous sports; others believe that people should be free to make decisions for themselves. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. (2011年7月30日A类)

There is no doubt that sports activities have always been appealing to the public of all class in most societies, and each of them owns a wide range of fans, including those dangerous sports, which arouses a contentious debate with regard to whether the government should restrict all kinds of dangerous sports or encouraging the pubic to choose it based on their own interests.

  Those who are of the idea that all forms of sports should be prohibited may seriously be concerned about the possible consequences the dangerous sports might result in, such as injury and death. A convincing case in point is that even the professional athletes are likely to get injured if they involve in such activities as boxing and wrestling and this would probably negatively affect their ordinary life. But it seems difficult for the government to draw a clear line between the safe and dangerous sports. If they banned football and basketball, there would probably be a dispute between a significant number of fans and the government. This is largely because those sports gain tremendous popularity worldwide.

  On the contrary, many hold the view that people should be granted to choose whatever sports they favor, regardless of its danger. It appears reasonable for people to make their own decision for adults are rational enough to distinguish whether they are capable of participating in those sports so that they could avoid the detrimental consequences. Even if they are injured, they could be responsible for their own decision. However, when the youth are taken into account, more consideration tends to be needed since they are less likely to be as cautious as the adults. This means unexpected consequences of taking part in dangerous sports still exist.

  In conclusion, I tend to argue that adults could have the right to choose whatever sports they participate in seeing that they are mature enough to make a decision while apparently dangerous sports for children such as boxing and wrestling should be restricted, or otherwise they should be supervised to take part in.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'public'?
Suggestion: public
... of dangerous sports or encouraging the pubic to choose it based on their own interes...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ose it based on their own interests.   Those who are of the idea that all forms...
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...ain tremendous popularity worldwide.   On the contrary, many hold the view that...
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Suggestion: many holds
...larity worldwide.   On the contrary, many hold the view that people should be granted ...
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...art in dangerous sports still exist.   In conclusion, I tend to argue that adul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, however, if, may, so, still, while, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, on the contrary, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15249266862 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77995966019 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542521994135 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.9084956516 49.4020404114 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.416666667 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4166666667 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.83333333333 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228273132362 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880377332719 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595944313691 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14803674044 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0193419320498 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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