Some people think that the government should give money to creative people such as artists and musicians To what extent do you agree

No one can deny, culture of nation are represented by the artists in the whole world. In past few decades, majority of people argue that funds should be proved to talented people likewise artists and musicians by the higher authorities. According to my perception, if government give the financial help to creative people thus they encourage those people and they achieve more in their field.
To commence with, artists and musicians play the essential role in order to represented the culture and creativity of any country in whole world. Nowadays, a ample of countries promote the talented individuals like Paris most popular to encourage the artists and musicians. The government of Paris always proved the all fundamental facilities to artists. Furthermore, musicians play the vital role for give the mental relaxations. To explicate, today each and every people have the hectic schedule and have a lot of pressure related their work, social status, career and many more things. So, people usual listen the music for relax their mind. So, I believe that, financial support must be proved to artists and musician by the authorities. Thus, people feel motivated and they do more in this creative field.
Moreover, in recent time, numerous famous artist and musician who achieve the great success in the world and they do a lot for their nation. To instance, when artists and musicians participate in the any world competitions and they win the prize, firstly, they represent their country in they whole world. Secondly, they also contribute in the growth of nation because after win the competition they get the lot of funds and many more thing. That all things give the benefit to their government.
To conclude, artists and musicians play the crucial role to represent the nation in whole globe. If government give the funds to creative people, so they encourage those people and they can get the more success in their field. Government should be proved the revenues to talented people.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, likewise, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07926829268 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6020515404 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460365853659 0.561755894193 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8846527446 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5555555556 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252203953529 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907174040701 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599419463045 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193371457079 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783340867124 0.056905535591 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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