Some people think that the government wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Arts play a crucial role in the society because we gain many benifits from it.Albeit, many people agrue that the government should not spend money on the arts and they should spend on other things to make better life.But,I think it can help and teach us many things.But, on the same way that many other things can make life good.So, I particularly agree with the statement.

There are many advantages that we can get form the arts.Firstly,it introduces our culture and tradition.And, many people like to see this kind of arts which reflict culture.So, the government can earn money easily.Socondly, people do work or only a job, so they have no intrest in any other thing.If they look arts then they may be inspired to do something.Thirdly, people can get creative ideas and also get knowledge about the history.Therefore, it assists us many things.

However,the government has to spend a lot of money to maintain arts.Also,they must keep high securty becouse it can be stolen.Furthermore,the government cannot earn more money from it.Insterad of, if they should spend those money to make new infrastuctures and improving old buildings then it will give good quality of life.Likewise,poor people do not have money for making a home and for treatment.So, the government has to think first about them.Moreover, science and technology helps us in our daily life.It makes our life comfortable, and it influences intensively not only on our prasent life but also on our the future.So, the government has to spend also money on these.

In conclusion, I believe that the givernment should spend money not only on arts but also on the other things because both the things can help and improve our life quality.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Albeit
...y because we gain many benifits from it.Albeit, many people agree that the government ...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 218, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...end on other things to make better life.But,I think it can help and teach us.But, o...
^^^
Line 1, column 221, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
... on other things to make better life.But,I think it can help and teach us.But, on ...
^^
Line 1, column 255, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...fe.But,I think it can help and teach us.But, on the sme way that many can be made l...
^^^
Line 1, column 307, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...sme way that many can be made life good.So, I particularly agree with the statemen...
^^
Line 3, column 52, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Firstly
...any advantages we can get form the arts.Firstly,it introduces our culture and tradition...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 59, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...antages we can get form the arts.Firstly,it introduces our culture and tradition.An...
^^^
Line 3, column 100, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...it introduces our culture and tradition.And, many people like to see this kind of a...
^^^
Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...this kind of arts which reflict culture.So, the government can earn money easily.S...
^^
Line 3, column 210, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Socondly
...o, the government can earn money easily.Socondly, people do work or only a job, so they ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 286, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...ob, so they have no intrest in anything.If they look arts then they may be inspire...
^^
Line 3, column 286, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ob, so they have no intrest in anything.If they look arts then they may be inspire...
^^
Line 3, column 346, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thirdly
...en they may be inspired to do something.Thirdly, people can get creative ideas and also...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 431, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...so they get knowledge about the history.Therefore, it is assist us many things. Howeve...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
... it is assist us many things. However,the government has to spend a lot of money ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 69, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
...o spend a lot of money to maintain arts.Also,they musy keep high securty becouse it ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 73, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , they
...end a lot of money to maintain arts.Also,they musy keep high securty becouse it can b...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 127, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Furthermore
...p high securty becouse it can be stolen.Furthermore,the government cannot earn more money f...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 138, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...rty becouse it can be stolen.Furthermore,the government cannot earn more money from ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 185, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Insterad
...vernment cannot earn more money from it.Insterad of, if they should spend those money to...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 219, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this money' or 'those moneys', 'those monies'?
Suggestion: this money; those moneys; those monies
...om it.Insterad of, if they should spend those money to make new infrastuctures and improvin...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Likewise
... then it will give good quality of life.Likewise,poor people do not have money for makin...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , poor
... will give good quality of life.Likewise,poor people do not have money for making Aho...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 399, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...oney for making Ahome and for treatment.So, the government has to think first abou...
^^
Line 5, column 448, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Moreover
...overnment has to think first about them.Moreover, science and technology helps us in our...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 508, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...d technology helps us in our daily life.It makes our life comfortable, and it infl...
^^
Line 5, column 620, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
... our prasent but also on our the future.So, the government has to spend also money...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, likewise, look, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, as to, i think, in conclusion, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1400.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03597122302 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31010313664 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521582733813 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 69.0 20.2975951904 340% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 181.46969444 49.4020404114 367% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 350.0 106.682146367 328% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 69.5 20.7667163134 335% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 39.75 7.06120827912 563% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 27.0 5.01903807615 538% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222778593981 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137785267247 0.084324248473 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041109242222 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137785267247 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041109242222 0.056905535591 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 37.1 13.0946893788 283% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 1.44 50.2224549098 3% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.44779559118 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 30.2 11.3001002004 267% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.14 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.13 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 9.78957915832 296% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 29.6 10.1190380762 293% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 10.7795591182 278% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.