Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?
Many people claim that it’s great idea to spend money on the arts and they think that the government should spend those money on the other fields. As we can see, almost of us usually watch, hear and enjoy the arts every day. so from my view, I disagree with that opinion from those people.The following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument.
Firstly, we should probably take a look at the role of the arts which play in our past, present and the future. The arts which includes music, art, poets, acting,...As we can see, the arts have been being one of the most important components for the development of human’s life. The arts affect strongly to our soul, our emotions, and also sometimes affect to our personality or behavior. Secondly, let’s imagine someday if we don’t have anything related to the arts.I’d say it’s “horrible” to think about that. And also let’s reminisce, if we didn’t have the arts in the past, maybe the whole world can’t get the development like nowadays, if we didn’t have it, so then maybe we just did our job in the farm, … went home and waited the time to go to bed, sounds like boring life, right ? The arts help our ancestors could have the relax and comfortable time after working hard all day long. Now get back to the present, same thing, after working or studying hard all day, people need entertainment on demand which is usually the arts such as watching TV to watch and hear some singers singing, or going to see concerts,...
Another point worth noting is about the dedication of the arts. Not only for entertainment, but also for the occupations , for the future, for the dreams of loads of people. For instance, a lots of jobs that many people want to be, which includes actor/actress, singer, artist, producer, writer, musicians,... and so on. that’s from the passion, the desire of those people who have accomplished or will do lots of things, lots of experiences to get those professions. they couldn’t live without the arts in their life actually. those jobs are worthy and grand dream. personally speaking, the arts play a pretty huge part in our life, so that’s why I totally disagree with the amount of people who said spending money on the arts is the way of wasting money.
Despite the fact that the arts which is really essential in people’s life. but on the other hand, I have to say that some people enjoy the arts “too much” and spend a lot of money on it. they spent hours and hours on entertainment that related to the arts and they even don’t mind or don’t concentrate about their main job. my own view on the matter is that’s the awareness of each person to the activities, behavior or their way to use their time in their life.
Weighing up both sides of the argument, I just want to say almost all of us can’t live without the arts, but everything depends on each person’s awareness on the time that they spend their time. if we use the arts positively, it’s really interesting and it will be one of the components help us get more energy to work or study better. As far as I’m concerned, I’d like to say that it’s helpful for citizens to enjoy the arts in our life. so that the government should still keep spend money on the arts, for the development of human’s life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, then, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 7.30460921844 274% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 61.0 24.0651302605 253% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 41.998997996 193% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2810.0 1615.20841683 174% => OK
No of words: 590.0 315.596192385 187% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76271186441 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92848004997 4.20363070211 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75864195941 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 176.041082164 155% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461016949153 0.561755894193 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 837.9 506.74238477 165% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 9.0 2.10420841683 428% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 0.809619238477 988% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 16.0721442886 162% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5319515423 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.076923077 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6923076923 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19230769231 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.01903807615 398% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 8.67935871743 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16027345124 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0545455558299 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579418420841 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114892575515 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041642335218 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.