Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extend do you agree?
Government funding for the arts is thought by some as an impractical expenditure which can be spent more effectively if this money is directed to other sectors of government. However, in my opinion, while I believe that funding the sector of the arts has a lasting advantage to the government, I agree that it would have more potentially constructive effect when this money were allocated to other government sectors.
Admittedly it is true that government can benefit from financially supporting of the arts, as it has some educational assets. One obvious example is that the arts foster young imaginations and facilitate children's success in school. Furthermore, early exposure to the arts will enable children to critical thinking, communications and innovation skills that if children gain them it will be a clear advantage to government in a long run.
However, there are more important sectors to invest money in. Firstly, due to environmental problems, the health of the public has damaged seriously requiring to be prioritised in the state budget. Secondly, the infrastructure of many cities needs to be met the demands of people and these demands are increasing rapidly because of ever- expanding population in the world. Hence, this sector of government has become one of the financial-needed area. Finally, there are economic sectors such as private and public which play a leading role in relation to the development of country if they are funded sufficiently by government.
In conclusion, although the arts are important in upbringing a young generation, the above-mentioned sectors more contribute to maintain stability in country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1396.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36923076923 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19185353581 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569230769231 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6410049131 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.909090909 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6363636364 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8181818182 7.06120827912 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218151586371 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0771682555789 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643769987447 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115813369103 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757501752124 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.