Some people think that hard work and determination bring success. Others think other factors such as money and good appearance are more importane. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.
There is no denial that opinions are divided that there is a group of people in the school of thought that being diligent and determination will bring about success. In contrast, the others buy into the belief that money and outlook are by far more crucial in this circumstance. Even though I tend toward the viewpoint that money is the key factor, both views will be demonstrate in this essay.
On the one hand, there are countless reasons why people state an argument that personality such as hard work and determination give rise to the proportion of accomplishment. One of the most primary reasons is that diligence plays an important role in our daily life, without this trait, by no means human can overcome heavy workload or deal with the scenario of being under pressure. In terms of working, people with an obvious orientation and make a great effort to obtain can climb up the career ladder faster. With these positive personalities, little wonder that this kind of people will act as a supporter and bring up their family.
At the same time, money and reputation are fundamental contributors to one’s achievement in modern days. Firstly, it is common knowledge that money is considered as the most powerful and valuable tool, enable human to manipulate and take the world into control. It is sensible that without money, human can not set up a business and run it in a long term. For instance, teenagers form privileged background is not afraid of being unemployed, by contrast, they can become an entrepreneurs when start up thank to their parents subsidization. Another logical reason is that apart from competence, glamorous outlook can bring about reputation for a person since the young generation are normally being enchanted by gorgeous people who set the trend, for example models or film stars. In conclusion, they can sign more contract compared to people with unremarkable appearance.
In conclusion, most of them are necessary to reach their initial aim. However, with money and reputation, people can advertise themselves and take a longer step to success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, so, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1744.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02593659942 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81872961664 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5734870317 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2752153486 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.266666667 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1333333333 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168749263263 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573791294724 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503808930284 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107534872024 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621410247836 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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