Some people think that human history has been a journey from ignorance to knowledge. Others argue that this underestimates the achievements of ancient cultures, and overvalues our achievements. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some people believe that the ancient period is time of ignorance. However, others criticize the idea because it downgrades the value of the time and overestimate modern achievements. In my opinion, ancient cultures are as great and prosperous as the modern cultures in that they have provided solid foundation for further development.
In modern era, of course, it is undeniable fact that a number of advancement has been made in every aspect of life. First, literacy has increased. This means more people are accessible to books and cutting edge information. In Korea, for example, the literacy rate is over 95%. Thus, a majority is knowledgeable or at least accessible to information if they want. Second, science has progressed in tremendous ways. With the help of technology development and enormous studies on human bodies and medication, the average longevity now is almost 100 years. In addition, Internet makes us keep in touch with the person on the other part of the world and provide various information. Moreover, even online shopping is possible. Third, art became various. Artists combines technology into their masterpiece, like Back Nam Jun, who was a world-widely known video artist. Also, fashion changes according to the season, trend or targeted customers. Therefore, it is firmly true that a great deal of advancement has been make in modern culture and it makes up prosperous.
However, in ancient era, there were still valuable and remarkable cultures and it became precious foundation for the current developed culture. First, alphabet and symbols for words invented. Based on the nature and surrounding environment, they systematized the expressions. In the ancient Mesopotamian civilization, for example, even abstract ideas are described through written message. Thus, it was a great starting point to communicate in written from and remain the useful information for others. Second, the ancient people provided the ground for the scientific development. They had their techniques of agriculture with accumulated experiences such as preserving the crops under the ground for cooler temperature. Later, it became the origin of refrigerators. Third, different types of arts had been produced and it inspired a number of artists. From drawings on the cave wall to accessories with wonderful decorations were crafted. These influenced to artists, designers. Thus, it is very clear that the ancient culture gave great foundation for the current development.
In conclusion, given that plenty of influences to modern culture, ancient culture itself has a great value. Those who under evaluate the ancient culture as ignorant are not actually considering their contribution to the modern world. Thus, we need to appreciate the great passed down cultures and estimate its value correctly.
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because it downgrades the value of the time and overestimate modern achievements.
because it downgrades the value of the time and overestimates the modern achievements.
it is undeniable fact
it is an undeniable fact
a number of advancement has been made
a number of advancements have been made
the number of advancements has been made
First, alphabet and symbols for words invented.
First, alphabet and symbols for words are invented.
From drawings on the cave wall to accessories with wonderful decorations were crafted.
From drawings on the cave wall to accessories with wonderful decorations, all of them were crafted.
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You have two main flaws:
1. the ideas are good enough, but the content is not organized so well. look at the transition words:
first, in addition, second, third, Moreover...
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2. No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
you still have some grammatical issues, though it is not serious
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 31 15
No. of Words: 436 350 //300 to 350 words are enough
No. of Characters: 2304 1500
No. of Different Words: 238 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.57 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.284 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.857 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 66 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.065 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.886 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.742 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.226 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.366 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.043 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 54, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[5]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun advancement seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much advancement', 'a good deal of advancement'.
Suggestion: much advancement; a good deal of advancement
..., of course, it is undeniable fact that a number of advancement has been made in every aspect of life. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, third, thus, at least, for example, in addition, in conclusion, of course, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2381.0 1615.20841683 147% => OK
No of words: 436.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46100917431 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97276286286 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 176.041082164 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559633027523 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 746.1 506.74238477 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 16.0721442886 193% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.2501392976 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.8064516129 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.064516129 20.7667163134 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.74193548387 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 3.4128256513 381% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104764655276 0.244688304435 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0255856705213 0.084324248473 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0290539256201 0.0667982634062 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0686086021008 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282988159243 0.056905535591 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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