Some people think the increasing business and cultural contact between countries brings many positive effects Others say it causes the loss of national identities Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion Give reasons for your answer and inclu

Some people argue that the expanding of business and cultural cooperation leads to the disappearance of some traditional value. Although it is true that this development can have certain effect on national identities, I would argue it has greater benefits

To begin with, there are a host of reasons why national cultures are considered to be lost because of the cooperation among multinational organizations. This is predicated on the consumption that this development could pose a serious threat to cultural and traditional value. Take, for example, the acceptance of same sex marriages and premarital cohabitation, which used to be strongly opposed in the past. Similarly, the appearance of a myriad of fast food chains, KFC, say, coupled with the hustles and bustles from daily life, directly changes people’s eating habit. This provides an alternative option as opposed to cooking on their own, thereby underestimating the importance of family meals as the way their older generations did.

However, I would argue this tendency is far more advantageous. Firstly, since international companies are increasingly expanding their businesses, there is greater need for the labor workforce. This offers to job opportunities for local people, helping residents to earn money and improve their standard of living. Furthermore, in order to compete with enterprises from oversea, local firms need to be more creative and innovative, which not only helps such domestic companies develop more sustainably, but also positively affects the local economy. Finally, by increasing cultural contacts between countries, individuals could have a deep understanding of other cultures, avoiding culture shocks or intense conflicts that are unwanted. In fact, an Italian person fought with a local one on Bui Vien street due to the misunderstanding of non-verbal language.

In conclusion, while it is true that the interference between businesses and cultures worldwide can cause the loss of some traditional value, I believe it is much more beneficial.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, similarly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, it is true, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1737.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56730769231 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17534721941 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3919590298 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.615384615 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2307692308 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151924155371 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507887832845 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480972621251 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101205714742 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265252495684 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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