Some people think it is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment for people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that public money should be invested in preventing diseases by promoting a healthy lifestyle rather than developing therapeutic treatments for the infirm. In my opinion, such an investment should address both of the mentioned issues to truly be comprehensive.

There are various reasons why many people support the idea of focusing on promoting a healthy way of life. First of all, running campaigns encouraging people to devise and stick with a healthy daily routine can help spread the word. Each region can establish their own publishers, specializing in health and lifestyle, and thereby raise public awareness of the significance of keeping fit and stay healthy. Moreover, should people be more aware of their own health, they will try to stay in shape and maintain their personal physical conditions at the top performance and, to all intents and purposes, immunize themselves from common illnesses such as fever, insomnia, and so on. The best part, interestingly, of this proposal lies in the fact that it doesn't cost prohibitive prices and, at the same time, saves a lot of time. Periodicals can be printed on a daily basis and through constant exposure to these materials, people should, and they definitely will, stay conscious of their own health for their own sake.

Although raising public awareness of matters relating to health is important, I think the effects will be even greater if a part of public funding is granted to researching and delivering treatments. No matter how hard one may try, he or she will, at some point, go down with minor sicknesses. It is at times like those that people will realize the importance of medical services. The contemporary treatments and pills have so far proved to be significantly therapeutic, however, if the pharmaceutical and medical industries receive more funding, state-of-the-art devices can be developed, therapies will require less effort and fewer pills will be prescribed and ultimately, more lives can be saved. Having medical services can help prolong our longevity so that we can make the most of our lives.

In conclusion, I reckon the public money should be balanced between promoting a healthy lifestyle and health care since these two mentioned measures, if combined, can make people's lives better.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, so, i reckon, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 7.85571142285 267% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20485175202 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89201874518 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606469002695 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.0583054254 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.928571429 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78571428571 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182923253511 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701972051313 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776039004348 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131294378952 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475243608468 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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