Some people think that national sports team and individual man and women who represent their country should be financially supported by government.However,others argue that they should be funded by non-government sources (e.g. Business,scholarships)
Discuss both view and give your opinion.
It is considered that government ought to provide with financial opportunities national sports team and individual men along with women who demonstrate their power for merit of own countries. Whilst some people think that non-governmental resources should financially support them. Personally, I deem that the former viewpoint which government should fund the sportsmen is better.
To begin with, several reasons are available why athletes should not be funded by non-government sources. First of all, it might cause that different protests by businessmen or others who work like this sphere. Because, it is not a secret that training of sportsmen does not demand little money. In this case, if businessman repeatedly pays money to support athletes, it may cause irritation of them. Consequently, they might remonstrate to government, and also, it may influence on reputation of country. Secondly, businessmen have own troubles such as sustaining their family. Thus, they may not be able to support sportsmens. Besides that, nobody likes to give money for unknown people.
However, the people who deal with a sport should be funded by government. Additionally, they must be provided with good opportunities many-sided. Since, if an opportunity is well, the result of athletes will be admirably in the world tournaments such as "Olympic Games". Whereas this effects on merit of country and it may become popular among other states. If sportsmen win in any competition of the world, they can be awarded with a lot of money besides medals. Subsequently, they can refund expenses which made by government. Although some reasons are available that are related to this funding by countries, abovementioned standpoints are more significant.
In conclusion, governments should notice to fund own athletes, if they want to be famous in the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 41.998997996 14% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2059.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 44.0 315.596192385 14% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 46.7954545455 5.12529762239 913% => Less chars per word wanted.
Fourth root words length: 2.5755095769 4.20363070211 61% => OK
Word Length SD: 43.6163483926 2.80592935109 1554% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 44.0 176.041082164 25% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 1.0 0.561755894193 178% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 10.7 1.60771543086 666% => Avg_syllables_per_word is high.
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 7.0 20.2975951904 34% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.1226405752 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 343.166666667 106.682146367 322% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 7.33333333333 20.7667163134 35% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.8333333333 7.06120827912 224% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 3.4128256513 322% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370064428715 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0985166117652 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105887031585 0.0667982634062 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237155892329 0.151304729494 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.072964357297 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 202.7 13.0946893788 1548% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -705.49 50.2224549098 -1405% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.44779559118 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 113.4 11.3001002004 1004% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 251.5 12.4159519038 2026% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 18.34 8.58950901804 214% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 40.0 78.4519038076 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 4.8 10.1190380762 47% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 252.0 10.7795591182 2338% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 22.4719101124 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 9
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