Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good member of society. Other, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Submitted by Rawa on Thu, 07/19/2018 - 02:08

It is been thought that to bring children up as a sociable individual is the responsibility of parents, however there are other people who sure that schools are established for this task.

In fact, children spend most of their time in school, so majority of people believe that their children should be taught not for only subjects, but some abilities ought to be shaped during their children are learning. If people communicate with variety of peers, there will be a great chance to be enhanced in terms of psychology and society. Of course most, if not all, of us are received something essential for our life, when we were pupil. To make a friend, to stand for close people and like this vital experiences are collected during the school period. Considering all the mentioned facts, it is obvious that the first step to be a good member of society begins from the school.

However, some people disagree with this idea. They claim that should play crucial role, when the point is about to prepare our children as a sociable individual. This opinion can be proved with many examples, for instance, children rely on their parents rather than others, so they might be influenced significantly by their mother or father. For them family is like a castle which is governed by their parents. Young individuals tend to imitate for them, because in this stage parents are the embodiment for every children.

By the way of conclusion, I would not be reaffirm that on of the mentioned idea is superior in order to bring our children up as a worthy member of community

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, for instance, in fact, of course, by the way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1322.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82481751825 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56742421712 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587591240876 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 400.5 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5874783824 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.166666667 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.08333333333 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25634674851 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0938522734061 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559803648918 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146576623234 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508589674401 0.056905535591 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.

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