Some people think the purpose of education is to prepare the future workforce and make good members of society. Others think the purpose of education should lead to self-fulfillment. What is your opinion?

The nature of education is to humanise human, stated by Paolo Pereira. Some people believe that humanising human means that every person should be beneficial for society on how societies get the advantages from their knowledge and skills. However, others believe that they attend the education institutions for having skills and experience as the tools to enter job market easily. This essay aims to discuss both purposes as well as provide several reasons.

People tend to focus on developing their social awareness through education in order to bring the society become a better community. They believe that the ultimate aim of education is that to contribute as well as to implement the knowledge and skills for the prosperity of society. For example, those who are expertise in agriculture science probably educate the farmers how to have a good quality of plants, how to manage the irrigation system well and how to conduct the product sales in the market. Moreover, graduates are believed as the social agents who bridge the society and government in terms of making society based policy. If there is a controversial policy that harms people, educated persons are probably asked by those people to help them conducting negotiation even against the policy.

On the other hand, some believe that the ultimate aim of having an education is that people tend to get certain skills and experience as the main tools to achieve a good position in the job market. The company might require well-educated workers and put them in a strategic position which brings them to such more prosperous economic life condition. It is undeniable to stop people making education as the way to gain personal purpose because it is their personal rights. In addition, government guarantees every single person to have education for whatever the purpose as long as it is still on the education rules.

I believe that both purposes of people in entering education institution discussed above might be in line together. We can be valuable persons for the society while having a job which we allocate some money from our salaries to educate people by providing the fund for those children who need it for school fee. The higher salary we achieve, the more money we can donor.

In short, everyone has their own targets to entering schools, universities or colleges. The most important thing is how to save ourselves by having a permanent job while contributing ours kills for the prosperity of society.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 423, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...his essay aims to discuss both purposes as well as provide several reasons. People tend...
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Line 3, column 303, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...osperity of society. For example, those who are expertise in agriculture science probab...
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Line 3, column 756, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to conduct' or 'conduct'.
Suggestion: to conduct; conduct
...ably asked by those people to help them conducting negotiation even against the policy. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, still, well, while, as to, for example, in addition, in short, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.3376753507 264% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2079.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 411.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05839416058 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65256809056 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501216545012 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 678.6 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.185931637 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.5 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2100486523 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747122415369 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496735869527 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121963994454 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0669250203372 0.056905535591 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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