Some people think reading stories in books is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children To what extent do you agree or disagree

While it is being said that reading books is more beneficial than playing e-games on the computer, I contend that the role of the former is equal to the latter. This view will be supported in the following paragraphs.

To begin with, reading books is the way to gain knowledge for people as well as for children. With the youngsters, reading enhances their vocabularies and highly developes language skills. In other words, when reading, a child can learn how to structure sentences and how to use words and language effectively. As an evidence, the more books we they read, the more active and versatile they are in communicating. To concretize, it means that children can easily express their opinion or talking with others fluently.

In terms of watching television or using advanced technologies for games, it brings advantages in cognitive development. These days, on television, it is easy to find any programmes and shows in many fields for children such as wild life, protecing oneself,... In fact, these kinds of information are not educated clearly at school. Accordingly, through videos we can absorb a good knowledge of common sense which is pivotal in our life, especially for children. Moreover, these activities can improve mental flexibility. In a little more detail, trying to finish several tasks in a game makes player better at solving a solution or adapting changes in their life.

In conclusion, I disagree with the idea that watching television or playing computer games is not as good as reading stories from a book. In many ways, both of them are one of the most efficient method in acquiring knowledge and developing life skills.

Votes
Average: 8.7 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, if, moreover, so, well, while, as for, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, in other words, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1390.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05454545455 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82713655723 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614545454545 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.0254706689 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6666666667 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234884430772 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703758784581 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0880892498831 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138600216062 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399536488306 0.056905535591 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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