Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Nowadays, parents often teach children to compete with their friends in studying, clothes, money or something like that. But others think doing this will harm children’s attitude and they believe that children knowing how to co-operate and help children will become an useful adults. In my opinion, I actually accept the second view and in this writing, I will outline the reason.
Teaching children is vital because it will help to build their attitude and behaviour. Children who know how to integrate and co-operate will definitely successful. If they and their friends together solve problems like maths, projects,.. They can exchange ideas and find the most effective and suitable solutions for this. So doing this help children to have a better relationship with their friends and develop their individual opinions and social skills. This will also build the belief from people with children and they can have big chances, big challenges in the future to show their experiences and knowledge. Through the co-operations, children become more mature and they can know what they are lacking and what they are doing the best.
On the other hand, when children listen to many opinions, they can lose the direction and their ideas. There will be a decrease in the belief in themselves, in consequence, they can scare of doing something wrong and being embarrassed about their little knowledge.
In conclusion, I suggest that children should be taught to co-operate with people but it must balance between their personal and the group. Children then can become more useful adults for our community and enhance society develop.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 272, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'adult'?
Suggestion: adult
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
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Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, second, so, then, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1381.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25095057034 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60774970849 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551330798479 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.540061988 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6428571429 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7857142857 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247443225808 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972263674033 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727583102887 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181781564639 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0831042854764 0.056905535591 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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