Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
In regard of different methods adopted to educate children, there are those who hold a belief that children should mainly focus on developing their competition. On the contrary, others advocate the cooperation between children in their development process.
To begin with, it is obvious that many children have been taught to become competitive since their very young ages. More exactly, by comparing them to their fellows in a variety of life aspects, many parents believe that their children will always have a convincing target to pursue and improve themselves. Also, it is undeniable that the more competitive children are the more ambitious they become. Therefore, when possessing these valuable characteristic features, these individuals will have more possibility to intensively succeed in their daily routine and future career.
On the other hand, it can be seen that the interpersonal cooperation is also another considerable factor leading to the brilliant success. In detail, it is a fact that a plenty of content ordinary people often work more efficiently rather than one distinguished. To be clarified, each person has its own strength. Thus, cooperation combines all of these advantages together and brings about unprecedented achievements. Moreover, working together assists children not only in improving a cascade of necessary social skills but also in mutually exploring and learning their own strong points.
In conclusion, it is apparent that each methods has its own way to train children to become successful adults. While the competition results in extreme self-stimulation, it is clear that the cooperation brings about social and skills and mutual improvements. From my perspective, I highly appreciate the interpersonal coordination because of its various benefits' usefulness and lower risks compared to the opposite side.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.64768683274 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10822262058 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622775800712 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7424813434 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.357142857 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0714285714 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35714285714 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243022235936 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803367828916 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431186596617 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134127831546 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234616573347 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.49 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.69 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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