Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Argument
children learn from their living environment a lot. To be specific, they learn their attitude from their parents, their siblings or even from their friends. some people argue that children can learn better when they are competition with other children, because other believe that they coöperate will be more development. however, the conflicting of children usually occur in coöperate more than competition.they tend to jealous or shed work to other and argument when dissenting.
The first argument is kids can support each others when they work with each other to make it better. however, it just true for teams which are all make sense to coöperate, with whom teams include low awareness members usually delay team work longer than everyone working along can do. In the competition environment, kids can develop themselves by trying better than their competitor. Also, they can show up their skills more efficiency even the shy ones such as public speaking, problem solving skills and so on.
The second argument is about the ways children construct their progress that children can work more effective because they have more idea to choose. Moreover, they can learn from each other to improve themselves. Although they can express their opinion in group, the idea can not develop if it is not chosen, and create inferiority complex with whose ideas are not accepted a lot. For children who learn in competition condition, they are more confident and have their own political opinions. According to some research, these children may have higher percentage successful than corporators ones.
In short, the competition condition bring many benefit for children more than cooperated ones. however, balance between them is more better.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1476.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3285198556 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60640819069 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545126353791 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.602350361 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4666666667 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237265333274 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0973431554597 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0865099961714 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16143241865 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599671374324 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.