Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects Discuss both views and give your opinion

Recently, people have had divergent views whether students ought to study the science of food and its preparation or emphasize the essential subjects such as math, literature, etc. Personally, I argue in favor of the second statement that students should focus on those main studies on school-time owning to important goals.
On one hand, food, nutrition, and diets play a pivotal role in human health. First and foremost, adding food science and preparation to students' curriculum assists them to have a full-scale view of nutritional ingredients. Hence, they can perceive junk foods, choose fresh products for boosting immune system and staving off diseases. Secondly, most fatal illnesses namely cancer, obesity, diabetes,... stem from non-scientific diets, drawing students' attention to healthy eating habits if they know what detrimental effects food components may trigger. By then cooking themselves, they comply with hygiene standards and cultivate the lifelong skill of preparing nutritious home-made meals.
On the other hand, as I gravitate towards, children should concentrate on important subjects. Starting with most crucial examinations require immense knowledge of mathematic problems, historical events, and so on that students need to make a great effort to pass. For instance, a number of high-ranked universities request their students to achieve a well-rounded understanding if they would like to win the entrance exam. In addition, the more children focus on essential, the better students' academic achievement. In the long-term, this will be advantageous. Students with phenomenal performance, for example, will have the others ' admiration, respect, let alone financial abundance so often associated with the acquisition of wide-ranging knowledge.
In conclusion, it is beneficial to provide children with food science. However, with the intense study schedules and crucial objectives, students ought to learn key subjects at school.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1671.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.80208333333 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05233218553 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6875 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.854723704 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.4375 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1875 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237622901139 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680276507415 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650973391993 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150256502526 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774907770924 0.056905535591 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.06 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.34 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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