Some people think that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others,however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it should be taken into account when deciding on punishment.
In my opinion, the conditions of individual crimes, and the motivation for committing it must be considered then deciding on the punishment for several reasons. When criminal was drunk at that moment or forced to drink alcohol by someone, one will lost his consciousness and do not even know what is he doing. Additionally, if the criminal is under the age of 18 and do not fully provided with article of laws it should also be taken into account.
Firstly, when person who committed a crime is under the pressure of someone who made him/her drink alcohol or other drugs, that criminal must be considered a victim. Since criminal did not intend to hurt someone with his/her willing. For example, believe it or not Mongolia is famous for its suicide among the teenagers. Our country has ranked in 3rd place with its suicide attempt which has been done by youngsters. However, our police force is so narrow-minded and do not even research the reason why they do that. Hence, I found out that when adolescents drunk they tend to force someone to do something brave and thing that can illustrate who you are. Therefore, teenagers attempt a suicide under the force of someone who has lost his/her consciousness.
Secondly, if criminals are under the age of 18 they should be considered as a person who cannot take the responsibility in front of law. Therefore, there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime as a juvenile criminals. For instance, recently I have watched a TV news which discussed about the juvenile crime and it said that the children who stole a loaf of bread was sentenced to 10 years which can be considerable negative impact on their future lives.
In conclusion, law is an elaborate and complicated thing. However, all we know is we cannot affect to the people's right. Additionally, we should not leave serious cases blank and must research them further to intercept and decrease crime rates.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'lose'
Suggestion: lose
...d to drink alcohol by someone, one will lost his consciousness and do not even know ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 167, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t criminal must be considered a victim. Since criminal did not intend to hurt someone...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'criminal'?
Suggestion: criminal
...nt for each type of crime as a juvenile criminals. For instance, recently I have watched ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82424242424 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74335996091 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560606060606 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7583791038 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298020607245 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09533430713 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112805215985 0.0667982634062 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17944322272 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0817777072442 0.056905535591 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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