Some people think that young people should be required to do unpaid work helping
people in the community. Are disadvantages of this requirement greater than the benefits
for the community and individuals?
It is true that volunteer work provides great benefits for both participants and the
community. However, forcing the youth to engage in those activities may be
counterproductive, as now will be explained.
On the one hand, if young people were required to do social jobs for free, there would be
certain advantages for all sides related. A vast majority of the younger population are
energetic, dynamic and passionate about improving themselves, and it is the unpaid work that can satisfy that demand. Charitable campaigns such as teaching primary
schoolchildren or helping the elderly with their daily activities provide the participants with
not only new knowledge and skills, but also a sense of community and a belief that they
are a pivotal part of societies. Vice versa, the government, with the assistance from young
people, has a productive workforce available for charity work without wasting money on
the recruitment process.
On the other hand, I believe that the disadvantages of this are more important. Working on
a volunteer basis may distract young people from their priorities. For example, students of
state universities and colleges are expected to attend lessons, complete homework and even
consult external academic materials. With such a heavy workload, those students should
spend their little remaining time relaxing or playing sports rather than joining free social
activities. Regarding those who do not go to school, vocational or internship courses are
what they should seek for. Professional skills from such classes are tools for these
individuals to achieve a stable later life; therefore, the community should allow them to
pursue their career.
In conclusion, the youth can choose to support others, and the volunteer work should never
be made obligatory.
- The use of mobile phone is as anti-social as smoking. Since smoking is banned in certain places, using mobile phone should be banned as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 61
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50533807829 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9227374748 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64768683274 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.914609814 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6153846154 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.30769230769 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 4.38176352705 479% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22894423949 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717923378407 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474374643846 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0511185438152 0.151304729494 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558294806332 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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