Some people think young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc to serve society Discuss both views and give your own opinion

People have a different perspective for the young generation to continue to study at higher educational institutions such as college or university or to work after graduating from school to help society. while there are benefits to working for the community after school, there are also good reasons why students should proceed with their education further.

On the one hand, working straight after school have its advantages. Firstly, young people can start to earn money at earlier stages than those who have to go to university. Therefore, they can afford their own living expenses, become more independent and mature. secondly, when those youngsters can getting wages by doing social work it would be beneficial for society. Moreover, they would be trusted and renowned among the people.

On the other hand, there are many purposes of having a higher education after high school graduation. At first, universities or college prepare or equip young people at higher level educational qualifications helps to produce certificates that they achieved in their studies that everybody expect to have.in addition, as part of globalization the global job marketing becoming more competitive and demanding.Thus, it is obvious that, candidates with higher qualifications can get chance to assess better employment and become secure.Furthermore,University graduates can expect higher salary than those without equivalent education.Moreover those without degrees are not trusted for professional positions, it may be impossible to become a doctor or lawyer without having the relevant degree and certificates.

In conclusion, it is clear that working after school and continuing studying in university have it's own unique advantageous.people should consider their career option and individual preference to make the decision regarding the matter.

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Average: 6.1 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Moreover
...than those without equivalent education.Moreover those without degrees are not trusted f...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...than those without equivalent education.Moreover those without degrees are not trusted f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1573.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.72 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.40277766946 2.80592935109 121% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 182.581050495 49.4020404114 370% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 157.3 106.682146367 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.5 7.06120827912 234% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195876838782 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0855668410502 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415769113377 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136257977961 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350088506489 0.056905535591 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 50.2224549098 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.19 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...graduating from school to help society. while there are benefits to working for the c...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 264, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...es, become more independent and mature. secondly, when those youngsters can getting wage...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 409, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
...becoming more competitive and demanding.Thus, it is obvious that, candidates with hi...
^^^^
Line 5, column 534, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Furthermore
...ess better employment and become secure.Furthermore,University graduates can expect higher ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 545, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , University
...employment and become secure.Furthermore,University graduates can expect higher salary than...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 632, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Moreover
...than those without equivalent education.Moreover those without degrees are not trusted f...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 632, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...than those without equivalent education.Moreover those without degrees are not trusted f...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1573.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.72 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.40277766946 2.80592935109 121% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 182.581050495 49.4020404114 370% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 157.3 106.682146367 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.5 7.06120827912 234% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195876838782 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0855668410502 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415769113377 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136257977961 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350088506489 0.056905535591 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 50.2224549098 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.19 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.