Zoos are an important asset of our society, some people think they are inhuman and should be closed while others argue that they are helpful in saving endangered species. I, however, agree to the former view but I also believe that they have far much more positive aspects which outweigh the existence of zoos.
The cruel aspect of zoos have many reasons, firstly, the animals have to leave the habitat and independence which they were previously enjoying while living in a jungle or a forest, now being caged in a zoo they have to live a life of misery where they cannot enjoy a liberal life. Secondly, there is a limited amount of food supply in a zoo, while those animals enjoyed surplus amounts in their habitat, thus making their robust bodies weaker day by day. They, however, loose the tactics of preying their predators which they used to do while living in a jungle/forest. Finally, a few of these zoo animals get exploited by their caretakers who train them for various shows and generate money out of it. Taking an example of a dolphin which is widely used for shows, it is trained well and then performs paid shows which generates revenue for their owners.
Looking on the other side of the discussion which reveals more of the beneficial aspects of zoos to our society, like its contribution towards education, entertainment, conservation and research of animal behavior and anatomy. Zoo is a prime place to make an animal safe from outside dangers like hunters who hunt them for their meat, fur or leather. Moreover, they are practically important in educating public about the animal behavior, anatomy and also from research point of view. People paying visits to these zoos help them to strengthen themselves from the money they earn from people. In addition to this, in zoos breeding the endangered species take place which helps them to increase in their number and avoids them to extinct. Taking an example of giant panda which inhabits in China, is an endangered species now, previously it was hunted for its fur but now after great development of infrastructure its losing its natural habitat by the process of deforestation. Establishment of zoos will save these species from dying out.
After analyzing both the perspectives, I am of the opinion that zoos have a strong advantage for both, the endangered species as well as for the society, but the animal's dignity should be maintained and they should not be exploited.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 125, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...vantage for both the endangered species as well as for the society but the animals dignity...
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Line 7, column 160, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
...cies as well as for the society but the animals dignity should be maintained and they s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, as for, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 416.0 315.596192385 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79567307692 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50402666658 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497596153846 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 637.2 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 416.0 20.2975951904 2050% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1995.0 106.682146367 1870% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 416.0 20.7667163134 2003% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 143.0 7.06120827912 2025% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270380557143 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.270380557143 0.084324248473 321% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188742334949 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056842558879 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 209.2 13.0946893788 1598% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -342.3 50.2224549098 -682% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 164.3 11.3001002004 1454% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.04 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 27.8 8.58950901804 324% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 53.0 9.78957915832 541% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 168.4 10.1190380762 1664% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 28.0 10.7795591182 260% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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