some people who have been in prison become a good citizen later. Some believe that having these people give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about the dangers of committing crimes.
Crime education for school students has long been a major topic of concern in society. There is a common belief that talks by ex-prisoners should be held at school to inform students of the threats when a crime is committed. While I accept that this practice is beneficial in a few ways, I believe there are many better measures of crime prevention.
There are certain benefits of having ex-prisoners talking to students about the hazards that are associated with crimes. The most obvious benefit is to educate students about the general knowledge of crimes. Those who committed a crime surely have gathered knowledge about crimes and the common motives of crimes, not only from their wrongdoings but also from communication with other criminals. From this, students may learn the early signs of crimes, what they should be aware of to enhance self-regulation to prevent crimes. In addition, ex-prisoners are those who underwent a long process of imprisonment and rehabilitation, so their life-stories are often a great source of real-life experiences of not only what prisoners are deprived of but also how regretful they feel. These stories, once verbalised, may deter students from carrying out a crime.
However, I am convinced that there are better solutions to prevent crimes. The most important measure is to introduce criminology as a subject at school, with both compulsory taught lessons and student-centred seminars. While life-stories of ex-prisoners are often biased, criminology knowledge is scientifically proven based on a large set of data and is much more reliable than a few single persons’ stories. With this method, students can learn all the necessary knowledge about crimes through the lens of science and therefore have a holistic view on crimes and crime prevention. The other measure is to film the harsh daily lives of prisoners and show it to school students. Ex-prisoners’ talks can be persuasive, but films with vivid images are be much more visually attractive to students and thus have a greater deterrent impact.
To conclude, I am of the opinion that although talks by ex-prisoners are of good values to school students, there are stronger crime-prevention measures such as the introduction of criminology as a school subject.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun single seems to be countable; consider using: 'few singles'.
Suggestion: few singles
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1916.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 364.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26373626374 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1091036943 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519230769231 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 599.4 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5513352939 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.75 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209890883132 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780596126386 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466522006277 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131728038667 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320901574665 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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