Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There are various views for working in the same organisations for a long time. Some could think it would be benefits to do so for comfortable and the development relationship with co-workers. However, working in different organisation can enhance adaptability and flexibility skills. Therefore, I believe that the improvement of social skills especially adaptation and flexibility would be more beneficial than that of feeling comfortable and building a business relationship.
On the one hand, working in the same organisation provides the feeling of comfortable, convenience and security. Always having the repetitive working cycles; same environments, same co-workers and same tasks or projects, provide the feeling of security and comfortable. Since the nature of people is a risk adverse, avoid the changes and challenges, many prefer to work in a same organisation. Also, there are opportunities to build a business relationship with co-workers. When people are working at the same company for a long time, they build a trust, honest and relationship with their co-workers and which easily become a business partner. Therefore, working within the companies for a long time bring a benefit of feeling of comfortable, convenience and security as well as building a business relationship with colleagues.
On the other hand, working in different organisations has several advantages. To start with, people learn the adaptation. Since they have to get used to new environment, new projects or new people, their adaptation skills will be improved. If they are working in different organisations in different countries, they might have to learn other skills related to the cultures (languages, customs and tradition, for example). Furthermore, people can get flexibility by working for different companies. Different companies have different visions and organising styles, which influence on persons’ flexibility in work schedules. For instance, Google has the flexible working schedules, whereas Ernst & Young is known for having strict working schedules. Therefore, by working in different companies enhance people's adaptation and flexibility.
In my opinion, I understand the comfortable feelings for working in a company bring a person with a security and there will be having more chances to build a relationship with a co-worker which develop to a business partner. However, this can be seemed as an “if”, because it is not always the case. In the case of my friend, David has worked for the Deloitte for more than 20 years but he has not developed any business relationship with any of his colleagues or tries to convince customers to be his own. Likewise, not everyone would be getting the opportunities to change the long time relationship into a business relationship. Even though the feeling of comfortable and convenience seems easy lifestyles, the adaptation and flexibility will enhance people broaden their views. Therefore, the opportunities to learn about the adaptation and flexibility have more benefits than that of feeling comfortable.
In conclusion, there are both aspects for working in a company for a long time. People feel comfortable, convenience and security by working in the same organisations for a long time but they would not be able to learn other skills such as flexibility and adaptability. These can be learnt by changing the organisations. By doing that, people are able to broaden their horizons.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'likewise', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'whereas', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'as well as', 'in my opinion', 'to start with', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.260296540362 0.247107183377 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.149917627677 0.155533422707 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0856672158155 0.0946595960268 91% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0329489291598 0.0501214627716 66% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0296540362438 0.0437548338989 68% => OK
Prepositions: 0.123558484349 0.122226691241 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0560131795717 0.0403226058552 139% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.25976768663 2.80594681477 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0263591433278 0.0326793684256 81% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0955518945634 0.0861772015684 111% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0214168039539 0.021408717616 100% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00658978583196 0.011925033212 55% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3449.0 1933.35771543 178% => OK
No of words: 534.0 316.048096192 169% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.45880149813 6.12580529183 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.20517956788 114% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.406367041199 0.374742101984 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.34456928839 0.28420135186 121% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.250936329588 0.203846283523 123% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.192883895131 0.137316102897 140% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25976768663 2.80594681477 116% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.037074148 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.402621722846 0.56093040696 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.4253222976 60.7387585426 76% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 16.0891783567 174% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0714285714 20.7743622355 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1055194537 49.517814964 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.178571429 127.492653851 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0714285714 20.7743622355 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.642857142857 0.814263465372 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.99599198397 0% => OK
Readability: 53.5283574104 49.1944974215 109% => OK
Elegance: 2.06976744186 1.69124875643 122% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352107539272 0.332605444948 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.131770444716 0.102741220458 128% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0940114509295 0.0668466124924 141% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.488757518485 0.534860350844 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.123304212682 0.148594505496 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128913419475 0.134430193775 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497490681245 0.0742795772207 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.359304942166 0.324371583561 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0843992367037 0.0638462369009 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243812251853 0.228012699653 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260890564581 0.058150111329 45% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 8.68436873747 230% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.41683366733 205% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 19.0 5.90881763527 322% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 1.9629258517 306% => OK
Total topic words: 26.0 10.4468937876 249% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.