Some say that music plays an important role in society whilst others think it is simply a form of entertainment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Many people opine that music is vital to society. However, others disagree, contend that it is essentially a method they use to unwind. I agree with both points of view and think that people should enjoy music how they want to.
Delegates claim music is indispensable in contemporary society as it can express feelings and ideas. With its lyrics and melody, a song can convey to the listener the artist’s emotions, whether it is cheerfulness or sadness. By expressing the artist’s state of mind, a musical piece can get individuals, who share the same feelings, relate to it. Thereby it is conducive for human beings to connect with others, thus amplifying happiness or mitigating wistfulness in some cases. World Cup’s songs, for example, could make millions of people sing along with and share their enjoyment of the sport together.
Advocates who disagree with this notion argue that music is just a way to relax. A piece of music, to them, doesn’t compromise messages or feelings. And consequently, they don’t feel songs relatable to them. Moreover, some students use music to fill the silence while studying. They listen to music in the background but focus on doing other things. To illustrate, the popularity of Lofi is on the rise as many students listen to them as white noise to study.
In conclusion, some treat music as a way to connect with others and share their feelings, thus enhancing or mitigating their emotions. However, many feel it is only a method to relax or study. As a person who uses that music to relate to people but also utilizes it as an implement to fill the silence, I think each side has its valid points, so we should listen to music in a beneficial way to us.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...nd that it is essentially a method they use to unwind. I agree with both points of ...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun feel seems to be countable; consider using: 'many feels'.
Suggestion: many feels
... or mitigating their emotions. However, many feel it is only a method to relax or study. ...
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Line 7, column 373, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a beneficial way" with adverb for "beneficial"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...id points, so we should listen to music in a beneficial way to us.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, moreover, so, thus, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82711864407 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66412643542 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552542372881 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0931293699 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7647058824 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3529411765 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136876627026 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0455218133429 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392536571857 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0928739018845 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302803741404 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.