Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university to work or to travel Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantage

The tight schedule and fast pace of life are the chief reasons why many graduates nowadays decide to take a year off, for they have time to apply for a job or to pay a visit to somewhere. From my perspective, this brings various merits such as self relaxation; However, the drawbacks brought from this prevail the positive aspects.
On one hand, taking off for one year is considered as a rewarding way to improve one's self since this allows learners to settle down themselves and prepare for an effective year. A gap year is enough for high school graduates to wind down by taking on loads of activities such as playing sports, learning a new skill, and accomplishing their passions; such these things do really help pupils to improve their fitness levels and feel delighted thanks to the dopamine produced while exercising. As a result, they receive a great source of energy to continue their career and ready to adapt to obstacles. Moreover, off year allocates learners time to expose to new skills that are advantageous for their later jobs, hence getting well-paid occupations.
On the other hand, a breaktime between high school and university can be detrimental to individuals on account of a variety of reasons. The first explanation for this is the negative effects on student's academic results when they find it hard to catch up with the pace of life. Due to a year of not going to school, they hardly can grasp all the knowledge that their peers learn, and peer pressure also stems from this. Next is family background, which has a great impact on whether graduates should take a gap year or not. If one's family is not well- off, it is unfeasible for him to be off for one year since he has to work to earn his living.
In conclusion, despite the benefits such as self improvement and goal shaping mentioned above, I suppose that taking a year off can result in more unexpected effects than that of positive ones. This type of healing is appropriate depends on the economic situation of each family in different nations and varies according to the needs of individuals, so graduates should contemplate carefully before coming into a decision.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, moreover, really, so, well, while, as to, i suppose, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1783.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 374.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76737967914 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64467699247 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580213903743 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.9091772974 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.153846154 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7692307692 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7692307692 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210166752985 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715655622031 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0398702713413 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119372565919 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570561052192 0.056905535591 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.98 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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