Some think that people are responsible for their happiness. Others feel that
happiness depends on other factors in their life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
While it is commonly believed the level of contentment is dependent upon a number of external
contributors, others assert that individuals have complete control of their own happiness. This
essay will discuss both perspectives and explain the reasons why I support the latter view.
On the one hand, there are extrinsic factors that contribute to happiness. The main justification
is that fundamental materialistic conditions play a role, encompassing factors such as access to
shelter, transportation, and nourishment, which ensure individuals’ basic existence and physical
satisfaction. If these needs are not met, joy will be far from an individual’s mind. Furthermore,
the quality of social connection also impacts an individual's perception of happiness. The
stronger people’s bonds are with their friends and family for instance, the less likely they will feel
negative emotions such as sadness or loneliness since they are safe in the knowledge that there
are other people who care about them.
On the contrary, opponents consider individuals to be fully responsible for their own fulfillment
regardless of their circumstances. This can be achieved through the practice of mindfulness,
which involves acknowledging present sensations without judgment. By embracing this
approach, the urge for constant improvement, expectations and regrets can be alleviated,
leading to an immediate and enduring state of tranquility. In fact, millions of people worldwide
are actively engaging in mindfulness practices taught by esteemed Zen masters like Thich Nhat
Hanh. Many of these practitioners have become passionate advocates, dedicated to assisting
others, particularly those facing mental or physical suffering, in cultivating mindfulness and inner
peace. Their transformative journeys serve as living proof that individuals bear full responsibility
for their own happiness.
In conclusion, both perspectives in this argument possess their own merits. However, I am firmly
convinced that individuals can cultivate their own happiness by embracing mindfulness. As
negative external influences abound in contemporary life, if everyone were to rely on factors
outside their control aligning to experience cheerfulness, it would be a rare occurrence.
Furthermore, as the benefits of mindfulness become increasingly recognized, a growing number
of people will be empowered to master their minds and experience profound peace and
liberation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 50, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ty of social connection also impacts an individuals perception of happiness. The stronger ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2138.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 354.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 6.0395480226 5.12529762239 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.36040429451 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627118644068 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5718642263 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.764705882 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8235294118 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 27.0 4.38176352705 616% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283263881518 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815281424773 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726171988935 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0681128591294 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0706613636278 0.056905535591 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.75 12.4159519038 143% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.16 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 78.4519038076 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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