There is an undeniable truth that people have the right to pursue what they desire. Many students are interested in additional subjects at university apart from the mandatory ones. However, others suggest it is crucial to concentrate their time and effort on a specific degree. In my view, both ideas have persuaded me for some reasons.
On the one hand, students who care about the so-called optional subjects are likely to be more well-rounded, which means they are not experts in a specific field but grasp a broad spectrum of knowledge. For instance, university students interested in PE classes, English classes, or some extracurricular activities will acquire optimal physical fitness as well as soft skills such as being bilingual or having time and financial management skills. Hence, they not only study their professions at university but also possess a state of well-being both physically and mentally, which may attract the attention of employers.
On the other hand, the number of people who focus on a specific area of study has the highest proportion of achieving excellence in their field. Since their ultimate goal is to achieve a good qualification that proves they are experts, they may not be specialists in dealing with problems outside their reach. Hence, employers find they are ideally suited for a specific role in an organization. For example, many students nowadays spend all of their time studying to achieve a desired degree and end up acquiring excellent professional skills and knowledge; however, they do not learn any soft skills such as foreign languages or social skills. As a result, their positions may remain fixed for the rest of their careers because they lack the soft skills that make people different from others.
In conclusion, both approaches have pros and cons. Being average in all aspects contributes to a more well-rounded individual, and these people have the potential to become good managers or CEOs. Having said that, being an expert in a specific field allows people to become excellent workers. I strongly agree that both types of people maintain a well-balanced society and advance civilization.
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- Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals Others say that there are more important environmental problems Discuss both these views and give your own opinion 84
- In many countries around the world rural people are moving to cities so the population in the countryside is decreasing Do you think this is a positive or a negative development 84
- These days mobile phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages 11
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 294, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, well, apart from, as for, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1814.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21264367816 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82484564881 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568965517241 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.7841588496 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.933333333 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.2666666667 7.06120827912 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223361343988 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769619587674 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419158768373 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136910650114 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544297540168 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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