A study shows that a lot of children from the age 7 to 11 spend too much time watching television or playing video games. How do you think this problem influences the children, their families and the society? What measures should be taken to solve it?
The issue of television and video games, especially the time that children spend on these technologies has provoked much concern among people. Thus, it is the aim of this essay to elaborate on the consequences and propose solutions to tackle it.
Children wasting time on television and video games causes a variety of corollaries. Firstly, the children’s health is affected enormously. To be more specific, if children devote a great amount of time to watching television or playing games, they will become lethargic and idle. As a consequence, they stand the risk of suffering from obesity and visual impairment. The United States serves as a perfect example of this problem. Reportedly, the rate of obesed children is recorded to have tripled in recent years with the advent of modern television and video games. What can be inferred from this is that television and game boxes are the root cause of children’s becoming inactive and indolent. Furthermore, in terms of effect on family and society, this situation results in the alteration of the children’s behavior. In other words, watching too much television fosters children to develop an introverted attitude to not only their family but the society as well. Hence, they become socially isolated, which is a detrimental disadvantage for them in the future.
However, there are many effective measures to retard the situation becoming worsen. The first method is to prepare a schedule of activities for children. Parents and children need to discuss together so as to plan a suitable timetable, in which the time on television is allocated equally to the physical activities. Then, parents must be responsible for ensuring that their children follow the pattern. This method has been proved to be effective in cities which have a high percentage of children suffering from fatness. Moreover, the schools and governments should be involved in dealing with this matter. Specifically, the curriculum should have more lessons relating to sports and schools should also hold more sports competitions in order to encourage children to take up more activities; meanwhile, the governments had better pass laws on the children’s screen time. Take China as an illustration, this country has recently limited children’s time on the Internet so as to help them concentrate on their study and physical activities. This solution is then applied in some countries due to its effectiveness.
In conclusion, there are numerous major problems caused by the exaggerated use of television in children’s lives relating to themselves, their family and the society. Consequently, parents, schools and governments are in charge of accompanying their children to handle this matter.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...s and children need to discuss together so as to plan a suitable timetable, in which the...
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Line 3, column 972, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...limited children’s time on the Internet so as to help them concentrate on their study an...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, well, while, as to, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2300.0 1615.20841683 142% => OK
No of words: 430.0 315.596192385 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3488372093 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00997440466 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53023255814 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 718.2 506.74238477 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1536433033 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6956521739 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47826086957 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393072070545 0.244688304435 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10880891795 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632477885364 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229477100883 0.151304729494 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0712735541768 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 78.4519038076 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...s and children need to discuss together so as to plan a suitable timetable, in which the...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 972, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...limited children’s time on the Internet so as to help them concentrate on their study an...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, well, while, as to, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2300.0 1615.20841683 142% => OK
No of words: 430.0 315.596192385 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3488372093 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00997440466 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53023255814 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 718.2 506.74238477 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1536433033 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6956521739 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47826086957 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393072070545 0.244688304435 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10880891795 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632477885364 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229477100883 0.151304729494 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0712735541768 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 78.4519038076 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.