Success is a luck
It is argued that some people’s success is mostly attributable to luck instead of their own hard work. However, I completely disagree with this opinion.
I believe that only determined and industrious people will be successful in whatever they do.Hard-working people usually attain their goals. For instance, Steve Jobs spent thousands of hours coding and experimenting to bring out the great Macintosh operating system that we use nowadays.Another clear case of success through determination is Nick Vujicic, an Australian motivational speaker,who suffered from a rare disorder which resulted in the absence of four limbs. Despite not having any hands or legs, Vujicic earned a bachelor degree with a double major in accountancy and financial planning; he had his own family, and now he travels around the world to inspire people as a motivational speaker.
On the other hand, by contrast, luck is only a small factor in determining one’s achievement.Firstly, people cannot solely be dependent on luck to become successful. If a student does not study for an exam, chances are he or she will fail, no matter how lucky he or she may be. Secondly, luck only contributes to short-term fortune.For instance, a person who wins a lottery is definitely lucky because winning a lottery does not require you to do anything to earn it. It purely depends on luck; yet, he or she cannot win the lottery for the rest of his or her life.
In conclusion, for the reasons I have mentioned above,I strongly believe that in order to achieve objectives in life,one must be extremely determined and hard-working to follow his or her passion till the end.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1384.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10701107011 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13293042698 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.656826568266 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.8221322276 49.4020404114 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.4 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204805621586 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823195494599 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906113253105 0.0667982634062 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116819024004 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0870304678071 0.056905535591 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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