Suppose Vietnam is going to host the coming Asian Games Write a paragraph of about 120 words to describe the preparations for the Games using the cues given below

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Suppose Vietnam is going to host the coming Asian Games. Write a paragraph of about 120 words to describe the preparations for the Games, using the cues given below.

To prepare for the coming Asian Games, we have a lot of things to do. First of all, we will build one more National Stadium, some sports building and car parks. In the present, National Sports Centres and local stadium are lack of good conditions so we must upgrade it. Next, we should widen National Stadiums more sizable about training areas and roads to sports building. In addition, we needs to be equip modern services and essential things for hotel, guest houses, also for disabled athletes too. Fifth, we should directly promote and advertise all the preparations for the Asian Games on the radio and TV. Besides, we need to recruit a person to volunteers to serve the Games. We can poke around teachers or students in university who are good at English. Last but not least, we will hold a competition to choose an official song for welcoming the Asian Games. To sum up, this is an important event, we will keep the ball rolling until the event has started

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...l build one more National Stadium, some sports building and car parks. In the present,...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 391, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'we' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'need'
Suggestion: need
...ads to sports building. In addition, we needs to be equip modern services and essenti...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, so, in addition, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 41.998997996 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 793.0 1615.20841683 49% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 171.0 315.596192385 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63742690058 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 4.20363070211 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36633364081 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 176.041082164 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.678362573099 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 241.2 506.74238477 48% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 17.7437312874 49.4020404114 36% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.3 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101861532168 0.244688304435 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479126843233 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641681079405 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101861532168 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 12.4159519038 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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