Is teaching people over 65 to use computers the best way to spend government money? To what extent do you agree?
We are living in the golden era of technology, modern devices have become more popular. While some people believe that improving knowledge about computers is the best way to spend the government’s budget, personally I partly agree with this idea because of some reasons.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why spending money teaching older people to use computers is essential. Firstly, technology can help older people in their daily life. Some older people are not able to use computers so the government should invest money to help them attempt courses. By doing so, they will not be outdated and they can approach high technology devices. It helps them entertain and learn a lot of new things such as surfing the internet, reading newspapers and so on. Furthermore, learning new skills is an important way for older people to improve their brain. When learning new skills, especially using high technology devices such as mobile phones or the internet, older people have to use their brain to access new information, by doing so, they can gain more logical-thinking ability. For example, using facebook , people will have to remember some steps to log in their account.
On the other hand, I believe that the government should spend money on other things for older people. Firstly, Instead of teaching them to use computers, the government should invest money on sport activities. Old people will have more opportunities to do exercises. It helps them sustain their strength and become more flexible. For example, the government should organize sports competitions such as football or basketball, by doing so older people can be encouraged to do more out-door activities. Secondly, investing money to upgrade facilities in hospitals or health care systems is an important thing. When people get older they can easily suffer from many diseases like obesity , so they need good healthcare systems. By supporting money to hospitals, patents will have better services, for example, upgrading high technology devices or improving resting beds.
In conclusion, while some individuals believe that teaching older people to use high-tech devices is the best way to spend money, I believe that they should invest money to build up hospital facilities or encourage older people to do more exercises.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 844, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ing ability. For example, using facebook , people will have to remember some steps...
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Line 3, column 684, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...y suffer from many diseases like obesity , so they need good healthcare systems. B...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1937.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22102425876 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72562006461 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485175202156 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 600.3 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5877006536 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.947368421 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5263157895 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.10526315789 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280410600846 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977772166208 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837502912498 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203366589319 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326777002659 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 844, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ing ability. For example, using facebook , people will have to remember some steps...
^^
Line 3, column 684, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...y suffer from many diseases like obesity , so they need good healthcare systems. B...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1937.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22102425876 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72562006461 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485175202156 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 600.3 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5877006536 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.947368421 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5263157895 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.10526315789 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280410600846 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977772166208 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837502912498 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203366589319 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326777002659 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.