Opinions are divided on whether people should learn about the way other people in the world live through video records. Although learning by written documents might improve imagination and broaden knowledge, I hold a firm stance that learning by video records is more accurate and more convenient for overall experience.
Admittedly, in some way, written documents could bring benefits to children in learning process. The main feature of written documents is that it describe information through words, which, in turn, lets learners’ creative ability probably be improved since it makes people to conjure up images on their own. This is a helpful assistant against automated employment today, where creation is one of the most significant factors in various industries. Moreover, written documents could also allows leaners to enrich their knowledge about their counterparts in the world. As a result, people could learn and understand deeper about the cultural, lifestyle and many other things of others.
Many stronger reasons could be given to argue that learning through video records brings more significant benefits than learning written documents. The most important reason is that when learner watching video records, they can see exactly the way other people in the world live like behaviour, lifestyles, cultural, etc. This has a positive impact on helping them avoid impoliteness or misunderstanding in communication which occurs when people learn about some situations that could not be described by words. Furthermore, written documents is not always available but regarding video records, it can be found easily on internet and it also has many image to illustrate the information which are rarely included in written documents.
In conclusion, I agree with the opinion that learning about other people live in the world through video records is more significant and more important for the full experience than reading written documents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 89, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to process'
Suggestion: to process
... bring benefits to children in learning process. The main feature of written documents ...
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Line 3, column 239, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lets learners’ creative ability probably be improved since it makes people to con...
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Line 3, column 490, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'allow'
Suggestion: allow
... Moreover, written documents could also allows leaners to enrich their knowledge about...
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Line 5, column 648, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun image seems to be countable; consider using: 'many images'.
Suggestion: many images
...ound easily on internet and it also has many image to illustrate the information which are...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, so, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52491694352 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77218189147 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541528239203 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.4325445069 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.583333333 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0833333333 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58333333333 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375346342684 0.244688304435 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151483928388 0.084324248473 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0937379513275 0.0667982634062 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268825338485 0.151304729494 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493454017063 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.