As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree
Some people think that businesses besides making a profit, they also need to have a social obligation. To a certain extent, I agree with this idea.
To commence with, if the business has many social activities, it can increase the value of the company and create the trust of customers in the company
Some activities which are related to social actions are usually good deeds, helping society to be more positive and more developed, so when the company tries to do social work, it can not only improve the image of the company but also help society become more and more ecstatic, develop in a more positive direction. For example, Unilever which is a pharmaceutical multinational company, an organization has had a profound record of giving medical or other financial aid to the most deprived people in developing countries. Thanks to those social activities, Unilever has contributed to reducing social problems related to poverty and health in impoverished neighborhoods.
On the other hand, we can't deny that the main goal when starting a business is to make a profit, so money is still one of our top goals.
In order to maintain the operation of a company, there are many factors that need to be used money such as staff salaries, operating costs, transportation expenses, ... in addition to developing the company, we also have to run some programs such as marketing. If there is no profit, the company will not be able to secure the budget to carry out the above activities, leading to the inability to continue the company's operations.
Besides, generating profits can also support providing investment for social activities. For example, with Unilever as above, if they want to provide medical and health services to the poor, the first factor they need is the budget to be able to implement them.
In conclusion, although I agree that social responsibilities are crucial and can bring a lot of value to customers, making money is also very important when running a business
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Suggestion:
... a more positive direction. For example, Unilever which is a pharmaceutical multi...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, so, still, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00284900285 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89622844481 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 579.6 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.274239349 49.4020404114 203% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 135.076923077 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.76923076923 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.38176352705 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368721899115 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146688335157 0.084324248473 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.171507851118 0.0667982634062 257% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222735688449 0.151304729494 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.259263788241 0.056905535591 456% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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