Most people say that shopping is like a task, a daily activity in the past. Nowadays it seems to become a recreation of people. To a certain extent, I partly agreed with the idea that shopping nowadays regards as a hobby even though there are still many people said that this trend brings some negatives.
On the one hand, there is a wide range of reasons why it is often believed that shopping is a positive trend, one of which is that shopping is a healthy leisure activity. Shopping is an action that splashes out money to buy anything such as luxury clothes, bags, … which helps people relax, relieve stress, have a positive effect on mental health when they feel exhausted or pressured. Especially this activity does not affect other people or the environment. Furthermore, it can also help the city to improve the economy because the revenue increases thanks to the purchase action of people.
On the other hand, I am convinced that shopping still has some drawbacks for people, the most obvious disadvantage is the waste of money. To be more specific, when shopping becomes a hobby, an amusement, people have a frequency of doing more than usual. It tends them to buy unnecessary things. For example, they will buy too many clothes just because they think it is trendy even if they know it is not necessary to buy a lot like that. In other words, the act of buying for a long time will make people addicted, so they will spend too much money to satisfy that hobby leads to waste money a lot.
In conclusion, I hold the belief that although shopping can bring a lot of interest in the economy of the city, it still has some damage for the people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... that hobby leads to waste money a lot. In conclusion, I hold the belief that al...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, still, for example, in conclusion, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1362.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57046979866 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41217054356 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536912751678 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6366567411 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.769230769 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9230769231 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23940400603 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807378149521 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778406443072 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147990090826 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118994134683 0.056905535591 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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