When new towns are planned, it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that it is difficult to plan new towns or cities. Some people argue that more shopping malls should be constructed while others are holding the opposite agreement. In my view, I agree with more public infrastructure should be build when a new town or a city was designed.
On the one hand, increasing public parks and sports centers will benefit city dwellers in several ways. First of all, open area such as parks will encourage city residents to spend their leisure time with their families and friends more because a big park will be the best place to get away from the crowded city area and take a relax after one-day stressful work. For example, join a barbecue party on the weekend with friends in a park will not just relax but also socialize which will improve their relationship. Secondly, obesity is a significant problem among people in current society. If more sports center will be constructed the more opportunities for a healthy lifestyle will be created. In other words, parents would bring their children to sports center more frequently. People can do exercise in a gym or swimming in an indoor pool which will make them fit and energetic.
On the other hand, some people believed that more shopping malls will provide opportunities for employment and promote the local economy. Truly, a shopping mall in a town or a city create a large number of job opportunities. Westfield, for example, many famous brand and small retailers enter into it, and they together provide much employment to the local residents. Additional, people would like to gather together to shop in a large shopping mall which contributes to a large amount of tax revenue to the government. Therefore, the government will use the tax income to build public infrastructure such as transportations will make another economic boom.
In conclusion, although shopping malls will benefit the local economy, the health of the local residents is a vital factor have to consider when planning a new town or a city. Personally, I strongly agree that it is completely indispensable to have more sports centers and parks.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...way from the crowded city area and take a relax after one-day stressful work. For examp...
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Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...hopping mall in a town or a city create a large number of job opportunities. Westfield, for examp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my view, in other words, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1762.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94943820225 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77502500754 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530898876404 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 548.1 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2871652418 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.647058824 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9411764706 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3529411765 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284125039456 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945299727316 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450499683501 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173700402832 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03574737391 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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