Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The idea that, the success of person is mainly stemmed from a question of luck remains a source of controversy. In my opinion, I purely disagree with this viewpoint.
On the one hand, people attaining their goals are determined and industrious person. Therefore, in whatever they do, they dedicate all resource to completely reach their ambition. To take a concrete example, Mark Zurburg who is ‘father’ of Facebook, spend most of time when he was student of Harvard university to code and build the Facebook that we use nowadays. Another clear case of success through determination and passion is Nguyen Ngoc Ky, who suffered from a rare disorder which resulted in the absence of two hands. Despite not having any hands, he still became a motivational and enthusiasm teacher who not only teach students, but also inspire them to learn hardly.
On the other hand, lucky is attributable to achievement but it only account for minor part. Firstly, people could not be depend on lucky to become successful. To exemplify, student who is lazy and inactive often fail the exam no matter how lucky he or she would be. Secondly, lucky only contributes to short-term fortune. For instance, a person who wins a lottery is definitely lucky because winning this lottery does not require you to do anything to earn it but checking the result on the television. However, most of millionaires earning the big money by a lottery waste money on redundant activities such as gambling, buying luxury items, thus they soon back to poor condition.
In conclusion, for the reasons I have mentioned above, I strongly believe that in order to achieve objectives in life, one mus be extremely determined and hard-working to follow his or her passion to the end.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: one mu; a mu; mus
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87232948119 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.658703071672 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5054980224 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.642857143 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9285714286 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1428571429 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105467825753 0.244688304435 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0320145368675 0.084324248473 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0287391671301 0.0667982634062 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.060121562397 0.151304729494 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267891453003 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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