You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are equally responsible for solving this problem.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?Give reasons for you

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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are equally responsible for solving this problem.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.

Nowadays a lot of children, especially in the richest State of the world, have an unhealthy life. In the first place this can be related to the huge number of fast food, fat foods and dish which induced problems to the heart. In the second place it can be connected to the diminishing of open air activities, sports and the increasing of using cars to cover short distance.

The intervention of schools and parents is very important to improve the lifestyle. In classrooms should be tought how live an healthy life with seminars where doctors, dietician and personal trainer speak to students. During the school period, some hours of the timetable should be dedicated to different sports such as football, volleyball, athletics and basketball and moreover, the school have to introduce some extra school lessons of sports and open air activity.

Although schools have an important role in the improvement of lifestyle, also families are very important in this. parents should enroll their children to some sport society since their have been very young. There are a lot of sports that can be practiced from children of all ages such as swimming, running or classical and modern dance. moreover parents should give the right example to their children and show them that is better use bicycle or public transport to cover short distance or cross the city.

In conclusion, schools and families have a very important role in the resolution of the unhealthy lifestyle problem. Both should give to children examples of healty life and help them to live better.

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Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 125, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...In classrooms should be tought how live an healthy life with seminars where doctor...
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Line 5, column 116, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Parents
...so families are very important in this. parents should enroll their children to some sp...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Moreover
... running or classical and modern dance. moreover parents should give the right example t...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: moreover,
... running or classical and modern dance. moreover parents should give the right example t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, second, so, in conclusion, such as, in the first place, in the second place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1304.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01538461538 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5867665041 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546153846154 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 392.4 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3684071785 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.666666667 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18122673467 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071943746108 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365366564353 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116168179545 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0235922167414 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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