You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Each year, the crime rate increases.
What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
ANSWER:
Annually, criminal activities are really escalating; the causes can be attributed to poor parental upbringing and unemployment. However, good child monitoring and provision of employment for graduates can curb this menace.
Firstly, a number of factors are responsible for increasing crime in the society such as poor parental rearing; modern parents are both working class and are not always available at home to check their child's upbringing; all the burden of child is left for nannies. Sometimes, these children are left unattended at home, which may make them fall into bad company and resorts to drug under peer pressure, while they turn to crime to get more of these drugs. For instance, a research study found out that, 80% children that are brought up by nannies turn out to be delinquent in the society. Secondly, unemployment is another issue causing frustration and hopelessness among people. The want to earn money and cater for their families is intense, if it is not harnessed properly, they can be involved in crime just to offer for immediate needs.
Furthermore, there are various ways to prevent or eradicate criminal activities in any given society. This lies mainly upon the parents, proper upbringing of the God-given children is essential, however, parents should be a good role model for their children, comfortable family atmosphere should also be made for them, as well as the circle of friends children keep needs to be monitored as to comb out the bad peer group. Moreover, the unemployment rate should be reduced to the lowest level as this will engage people, likewise, vocational training be made available for all. When all these are put in place by the government, deliquescent will be reduced to the barest minimum.
To conclude, yearly frequent cases of crime in the society is because of poor parental rearing and lack of empowerment like jobs, whereas, proper upbringing and provision of job opportunities can curb this menace. Government should provide adequate vocational skills for its citizens to harness urge for crime.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, likewise, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, while, as to, for instance, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21428571429 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.777063223 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589285714286 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.2426485535 49.4020404114 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.769230769 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8461538462 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0769230769 7.06120827912 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20460840912 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0758944916622 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0370729780123 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127144896539 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245742841132 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.