Young people who commit crimes should be treated in the same as adults who commit crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, there is increasing concern over the significant increase in the number of teenage criminals. Some people think that they should receive the same kind of punishment as adults who commit crimes. However, in my opinion, I believe that the government can help these young criminals get back to their life by educating rather than treat them in jail.
To begin with, most of adults criminals are the results of unemployment in society and the addiction to a drug. Meanwhile, the most common reason cause youngster commit crimes are that they try to imitate others to do some illegal activities such as gambling or robbing. For instance, a teenage boy becomes a murder by killing all members of a family to rob their money for buying drugs.
In my opinion, treating these young criminals in the same as adults may not help to reduce the number of crimes. First, punish a criminal severely may be a good way to help others realize that they will pay a huge cost for the illegal activities they have done. However, youngster’s personality is not fixed yet, it is easily affected by others and may not distinguish what things are right or wrong. Therefore, I personally believe that the right way of rehabilitation and re-education process can help these young troublemakers understand more about morality and to respect their own life and other people life.
In conclusion, the young criminals should not be treated in the same as adults due to the fact that they are still young and have a long future lying ahead. Therefore, they can be re-educated to gain knowledge and get their life back easier than adults.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the adults') or simply say ''most adults''.
Suggestion: most of the adults; most adults
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...get their life back easier than adults.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1355.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8916967509 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69175156047 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541516245487 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5469745991 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.916666667 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0833333333 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.75 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23175631628 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0872989548048 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103610402227 0.0667982634062 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141901716351 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547074285343 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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